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my hometown is a very beautiful city. in my hometown there have a famous lake what name is luomahu and it is verybig and clean.my hometown is xiangyu`s home.he is our hero when we was young.my mom often told us something about he. we like the lake.because it bring me introthing memory.when we was young we often watched the fish play in the lake.we also swim in the lake with our friends.now we can talk about xiangyu.he is a volar people.his wife is yuji and she killed herself for xiangyu.
