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MyFavoritFestival There is many festivals in my country. Such as Spring Festival, Mid-autum Festival, May Day. But I like Spring Festival best because it is our traditional festival. Family get_together and have a big dinner. We children can get lucky money from my parents. We can sing, dance, games with our friends. We can enjoy ourselves.