2005年1月英语六级作文真题:对病人进行捐助

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As we borned to this world,we would meet a lot of troubles in life and so that we need help from the other.There is a patient who gets a serious ill and will die without medicines is my friend.But as i know she was born with a poor family.So she need donation to support her to live. Her name is Maria and has two brothers who are studing in college and they can not affort their old sister's medicines cost.She has a dad who stay at home is disabled and her mother was dead because of serious ill. Now my friend maria is become more and more seious and need operation to ease her pain now. If what i said can touch your heart,please donate some of your money,it does not spend your much money but you save a girl who live with you in earth.Please call ********** if you want.