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I have got a good friend.He's name is bobby.He's ten.He is a student.And he love his father and mother very much.He likes playing basketball,he is good at it.All of us love him.Because he loves us,too.At the holiday,he often goes swimming.He is a good boy!He is very handsome.He often help other friends,oh,he is a good boy! Everybody loves him!