拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
As is known to all,"It is unwise to put all eggs in one basket."The meaning of this old saying is to avoid all the eggs break in one basket.So the implication is that we should make a diversified development. However,several of humans can acquaint with it in this rapid development world.We can see varieties of informations about the unemployment of college students.One of the reason that causes unemployment is that they don’t have various abilities to meet the company’s need,which they have been interviewed. With the rapid development of science and technology,college students should make a change on their mind and ability.If they just own one skill,they would not find their space in this world.So what they can do is to change and develop themselves gradually to avoid elimination.