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Nothing Succeeds Without a Strong Will As far as I am concerned, there are a great numbers of factors leading to succeed, however, a strong will surely is the most signficiant factor. A person will meet many unexpected difficulties at his way to succeed, and at that time, a large precent of them may give up, so that only the person with a strong will can carry on. To put it another way, we can hold the brief that only a strong will preson can achieve the greatful mission. For instance, Marx, the most famous philosopher, had a hard time decades years. When he decided to insist on, he succeed. There is no doubt that students are the same. If you never study hard, it is sure that you will not to be a excellence person. At the result, you are required to study hard if you have a dream about succeed.