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作者词汇量积累不错，学术词汇希望能用的更熟练，不过有些单词拼错了；简单句比重稍微偏高，注意个别句子错误；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少。
with the rapid development of economy,happiness show a significant increase in many countries .as far as i am concerned ,happiness benefit the people,s health and make u healthy . if u want to happy,u had better do some exercises .such as palying ball games ,running ,swimming ,jumping ropes . on the other hand ,happiness brings huge benefits to mankind . the reason why happiness are varied .first of all ,wirth better economic condition , it is justfied for p to do pay your attention to your diet or meals .don,t eat too ,uch meat or suger,but more veh=getables and fruit. u should enough sleep or rest .next keep yoursely happy .as p often say smiliing makes younger .in the future .happiness should be encouraged .we need to promore e f l ,and o any waste and tighten finncial budgrt .
