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In China,there's a saying that "The landscape of Guilin tops that of any other place under heaven." In light of this,I will recommend Guilin as the first destination of my foreign friend's trip to China. Overlooking the Li Jiang River,Guilin is located in the northeast of Guangxi. The name was derived from the cassia trees of the location. The trees line the streets of the town with yellow flowers blossoming every September,filling the air with sweet scent.