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It is unwise to put all eggs in one basket As an old saying goes"It is unwise to put all eggs in one basket."It demonstrates that when you put all things together,eggs are breakable easily so that you cannot conserve all.The famous remark warns someone who should do things one by one that you can do every thing well.If you do all things together,you will feel tired and can't pay attention to each thing so that this things will be terrible. As far as I am concerned,focus on one thing is important for you to do it well and it will be benefit for you in the future so you can easily succeed.For example,when you walking at the street as well as looking your telephone,It is dangerous to take notice of the cars arround you.