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Hello ,i have a classmate named John.We always goto class toghter ,so we are good friends,I'm so lucky that i could have a frieng like him .When i trapped in trouble he he give me hand at first time.So i want to be a men like him ,ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha ha