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How to improve students's mental health There is no doubt that student's mental health plays a significant role in their study and daily life.We should attach much importance to student's mental health. For the part of school departure,a series of measures should be taken such as organizing some psycological consulting departures,some chairs about how to deal with mental problems as well as advice from psychological teachers.For the part of students themselves,which is the most important part,they should get along well with their mental issues,dealing with themselves at first as possible as they can,however sometimes dealing problems only by yourselves doesn't work.If it did,we could turn to others for help,like trying to talk to the elders. With all measures into practise,I wish all of us could get rid of psychological garbage,and living together with a good mood.