雅思写作范文:父母应该多陪孩子

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without Few parents with their children ,there would be no high quality of labour force to ensure a long term ecoonomic boom.in a modern high tech and information socirty we much care and attention from paremts .on ly in this way can we become well educated professionals with the spirits of innovation and creation than in an indutrial society.it can makes incredible contribution to us.it help us understand people need love between us and enhance our awareness of the p and p to achieve this goal of it takes the effort of the parents and children.