作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
When we were in primary school,the stores we learned form books are always about happiness. What is happiness?This question were thought by many people for many years. Weather the happiness is exclusively a happy life without any problems or get much money?I do not agree with that but I suppose that truly happiness in our life is overcome the problems we meet.The sence of conquer intricate things which confused us all day long are good.The man who lives on this world can not shun problems.It is inevitable.We need to learn how to face them and how to tackle them. Deal with the problems is the foundamental thing of happiness life.