文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;作者有一定功底,可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
As we all know that there are a lot of famous scenic in China,however,in my heart I think the most beautiful place is my hometown.Not only because that it is the place where I was growing up,but also because it is really a very interesting place. First of all,the peoples living there are very friendly.The first time when you came to my hometown,everyone on this town will treat you as a very familiar friend,they will send you a lot of beautiful flowers and welcome you to eat dinner at their home. Secondly,many famous scenic spots are located on there.For example,the Great Wall,which is a symbol of the most greatest works created by ancient peoples.Everyone in China are very pround of it.Of course,there are also other famous spots,like the Palace and the Tiananmen and so on. In a word,my hometown is the most interesting place in my heart.And I believe that if you come to my hometown you will surely get a good experience.