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The Internet In the era of information and technology, the Internet has played an important role in our society. With the Internet, it's easy to get the information we need, improving the efficiency of our study and work. We can't deny that it is impossible for lots of people to achieve great success in the modern society without the Internet. However, some people think that the Internet has a bad effect on growth of teenagers. The teenagers are too young to resist some temptations from the Internet.Some of them indulge themselves in the Internet,especially play computer games day and night. In the end, they start to play truant and lose themselves slowly. In my opinion, we should pay more attentions to the advantages of the Internet and make the most of it. Meanwhile, we should teach the teenagers how to use the Internet correctly,and make the Internet become a beneficial tool on their daily life, including their study and healthy development.