正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;作者能较灵活地使用词汇,学术词汇使用较恰当,但存在一些拼写错误;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
With the soical improving,there are always computers and Internet in people's daily life.Tp be honest,Internet help us communicate with families and friends,explore informations what us need.It make our lives be convenient. However,Internet make the world be small.We can conmmunicate with someone anywhere.We can talk with them to know what the world is.What's more,we can see families who are in an other place,when we miss them. But Internet also have an important influence on interpersonal communication.Now We would rather stay at home than go out to playing with friends.We become colder and colder.We lost so many chances which we can be togther with someone we cherish.We maybe ignore them. So ,Internet is so good and amazing.But we should some interpersonal communication in real life.
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