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Say hello to you my dear foreign friend and wellconm you to my hometown .I'm very glad to tell you about my hometown ! my hometown is located sichuan luzhou,it famous for a long history of wine cultural and lots of delicious food such as huangba guiyuan and so on ,,, at there you can have some sights of beautiful mountains,rivers and buildings which are build at ancient.somewhere is interesting and exciting, I'm sure you will love it .there are so many espcial foods and kind people every is friendly to others and like you to visit thier home .so at there you will never fell alone .if you find something are not ok you can tell me and I will give you a good idea. would you like my hometown ? all of us hope you can go there and give you a unexpect surperiece ,come in here soon,my deear friend.
