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Dear principle, I’m writing to tell you about the discussion we’ve had about whether a mobile phone should be brought to school. In ourdiscussion,70% students in our class against bringing mobile phones to school,and the others agree.Every student has their own opinion. Those who aginst it think that it is unnecessary for students to bring it to school because it will take a bad impact on study,many students won't learn with teacher but care more about their mobile phone.Besides,buying a mobile phone will take economic burdens to the parents.They think it is not able for every family to buy a mobile phone without economic burdens. The other students think students can bring mobile phones to school,but those who bring mobile phones must turn off their mobile phones when the class begins.In other views,school should not keep the students within a certain old discipline. This is the reult in our discussion. Yours sincerely, Li Hua
