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My best favorrite sport is play soccer. By chance, I fell love with playing soccer.Oen day,I find a ball on my way to home. So I played with my friends. We felt very happily.Then I was love playing soccer.I uauslly jion the trains.And I took part in many competations.My best wishes is become a truth