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Living in the information age,we can get all kind of informations by differenct way. For example,we can get news from radio,newspaper,internet and so on.But some people make a conclusion just by seeing and listening.they don't make conclusion by practice which cause some single-faced for them. as far as i am concern,i disagree with those who just concluded by seeing and listening.firstly,it is very easy to make a wrong conclusion just by this way.peopel can not konw the turth of the things clearly.secondly,people will get some wrong news,for example,when earthquake happen in japan,it caused nuclear let out.many people think that salt can prevent the radioation and most of them went out to buy salt crazy.actually,salt can not prevent the radioation.thirdly,people just conculded by seeing and listening cannot have their own views about the truth. taking all these factors into consideration,we may safely come to the conculsion that it is unwise for ua to make a conculsion just frome seeing and lisetening.real knowledge comes frome practice.
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