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As we all know, putting all eggs in one basket means that you will win a lot if you go through a well-off situation.However, in some cases, it also means that if you fail you will lose all, In other words, you have to undertake lots of risks if you put all your eggs in one basket. If we put the advantages and the disadvantages together, the choice is distinct. That is, it is unwise to put all eggs in one basket. There are numerous examples can illustrate this point, but I think the following example is suffice. when we buy stock, we always hear the old investor told us that don't put all your eggs in one basket. because if the stock's situation isn't good,you will lose lots of money and the risk is tremendous. but if you put you money into different stocks, it will decrease your risk, which means that if one of your stocks is in a bad situation, the rest of yours isn't in a bad situation and you won't lose much money. That is why setting all eggs in one basket is unwise. As far as I am concerned, in our life, we shouldn't put all our eggs in one basket which get down lots of chances and is bad to our life. We will lose lots of chances to success. Thus, putting away your eggs in different baskets is a good choice for us.