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the classroom is a place where students to acquire knowledge so should be quite .some students bring mobile phones into the classroom lead to we often hear phone ringing in the classroom .also,some students texting in class which belong to a waste of valuable learning time.i suggest that college stuidents should be encouraged to turn off the phone in class including answer the phone or texting.they have bad influence on students ,s learning .so we should debvelop the sense of duty.we should also have pore opportunities to ust it in right occision and time so that we will treasure what we have learned and make the best use the school hours The classroom is a place where students learn, need to be quiet. (2) often hear phone ringing in the classroom. (3) still, . (4) suggest that students have a cell phone don't answer the phone or texting, should focus on learning