作者词汇量积累很好,学术词汇积累要重视;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
I come from a village where is peaceful.Now,I'd like to introduce my family to you. To begin with,there are six people in my family,that are my grandpa,my parents,two brothers and I.My grandpa who is 84 years old with white hair.My grandpa is very kind and always has a very big and happy smile on his face.What's more,he always try his best to help others.Maybe he was tired but very happy.Not only did my father very thin but he also very tall.Thin as he is,he has great power and strength.The woman who has a short hair is my mother.Besides,she is a little fat.Her role as mother and wife at home,she is always take care of us.Although she is plain,she is hard-working.I love her very much.I have two brothers and both of them are very tall as well as handsome.They are studying in the LaiBinMiddle school. As far as I'm concerned,money is not everything.It is important for us to get along well with families.My family living in harmony.I think,I am so lucky to have such a happy family.