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新东方托福高分作文:呆在原地还是搬到别的地方?

发布时间:2013-07-25 16:30浏览次数:1005
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【题目要求

Some people spend their entire lives in one place. Others move a number of times throughout their lives, looking for a better job, house, community, or even climate. Which do you prefer: staying in one place or moving in search of another place? Use reasons and specific examples to support your opinion.

【题目分析

选择哪一个都无所谓。直接选择一个立场,文章就变成了罗列三个理由的简单说明文。后者比较容易操作一些。也可以采取it depends的策略。小的时候,没有选择,父母在哪里,自己就要在哪里; 长大了,就会不停地寻找合适的地方; 到了老年,就喜欢停留在一个地方了。

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单词拼写做的很好,请注意积累词汇量;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;语言不流畅;请注意分段;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开;连词使用偏少。

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dfh sdfhsdfh sgh sfgh sthfgh sh shsth werthsfh shbsdfhd hha fga lesson 1 a private conversation first listen and then answer the question why did the writer complain to the people behind him last week i went to the theatre i had a very good seat the play was very interesting i did not enjoy it a young man and a young woman were sitting behind me they were talking loudly i got very angry i could not hear the actors i turned round i looked at the man and the woman angrily they did not pay any attention in the end i could not bear it i turned round again i can t hear a word i said angrily it s none of your business the young man said rudely this is a private conversationlesson 1 a private conversation first listen and then answer the question why did the writer complain to the people behind him last week i went to the theatre i had a very good seat the play was very interesting i did not enjoy it a young man and a young woman were sitting behind me they were talking loudly i got very angry i could not hear the actors i turned round i looked at the man and the woman angrily they did not pay any attention in the end i could not bear it i turned round again i can t hear a word i said angrily it s none of your business the young man said rudely this is a private conversation

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