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文中词汇表达较丰富恰当，但学术词汇稍显不足；作者在句法层面做的很棒；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少。
As the booming of many electrical and technology development, human's life become more and more rich. So many people begin to pursue more cozy life such as using their superfluous money to buy car instead of walking and riding by bike because it is faster and more convenient and what's more, you are no longer afraid of cold in the winter if you are going to work or go to other places. Following with the more and more cars, some traffic problems occurs which including the traffic jam and environment pollution, especially in some big cities. Of course, there are some other traffic problems such as the traffic pressure in big cities. Have you ever been angry about the traffic jam when you're in a hurry to work or have an important meeting but you have nothing to do to make so many cars disappear in our eyes? I have. Have you ever taken the subway or buses in rush hours and there is barely one foot for you to stand? Yes, I have. There are so many people who working or studying in big cities that the traffic pressure no matter ground but also underground are heavy even though there are already so many traffic tools including buses, subways and so on, the number of traffic tools are far away from the number of people. Maybe some people will chose to drive a car to escape from the crowded space in the bus or subway. Then you are wrong, because not only you have a car, so many people do. And if you drive a car to work, you will confront with the traffic jam which makes you be late for your job. So many problems need to be solved. We call for people to take buses or subway to work especially when you are in emergency because it makes little air pollution at least. And the government should take measures to solve the traffic pressure.
