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there are lots of tourists in zoo and they feed the monkey and take the picture for tiger.actually,they are so cute.since p have already the importance the animals we should do many things to protect them which are friendly to them and take care of them.they bring me a sence of accomplishments and adds much fun to my life.don,t throw the rubish everywhere in the zoo and we can develop a sence of resonsibiliy to take care of them.they are good companies for humanbeings.animals have been used to severe people in many ways .they are used to guard house lead the blind people and herd sheep .because protecting theanimals is protecting ourselves
