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拼写很棒，可适当增加学术词汇的使用；作者句法不错，但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少。
Men and computer It is well known that computer has made a big advance during these years.The connection between men and computer becomes more and more closer. There are a lot of things which we can do through it.In schools factories and office buildings .It can not only help people do many works,and it also provide people some communication tools,entertainment,easy shopping ways and other conviences.nevertheless every coin has two sides ,a great many people are two addicted to it.they play games,see movies wasting a quantity of time.what 's more,it has a bad effect to our health. As to me what is the most important is that how to use it in a right way to get more advantages.first,we should use it when it is needed.we'd better avoid using it when we have something more important to do.Second,Contorlling the time we use it is also significant .If we use it more then a fixed time.we may not maintain a good state.
