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As we know ,it is unwise to draw a conclusion when we see or hear something immidietly, we should make a decision before we think it is meaning. There are three reasons to support my view. firstly when people is in a high spirit ,such as ,sad or happy, if we draw a conclusion ,the resoult always make us crazy,and be in hign spirit can give us wrong information and affect our behavior. secondly , sometimes, what we see or hear is not always the object they are, for instance ,many people want to have a beautiful face ,so they spend lots of money and time to face lift ,but in fact they are still is what they are.Thirdly .as far as my concerned ,the thing's conclusion have association with people's characters in a sense .when people is kind ,he can think about everything is wonderful,when the people is only think about himself ,the conclusion maybe oppose totally In my point , we shouldn't come a conclusion fallow what we see or hear in a hurry .thinking before action ,it can make matters become more perfect
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