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to solue the problem of killing the whild animals .cities should work out a plan of how to pmake the best use of animal protection act to save he animals .we should do our best to take care of it in order to avoid to hunt or harm them.we should persuade citizens to live they life they lke.all in all,if everybody realizes the important of it and does sth to stop it .the problem will be solved step by step.many animals cannot protect thenselves in proper way,thus the wole world were set up an organization to protect them.