文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;采用了一些简单的从句;请注意分段。
Nowdays,more and more violent things in school have happened.Many Chinese are surprise to school safety and drop in thought how to improve school safety.The following are my thought and advices. First,I think the government should be careful school safety.Why not to do more education in school? second,teachers should be link to students' parents as hard as they can so as to