2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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Dear Lily, I would like to invite you visit my hometown,which is a beautiful place .In the first place,we will go to NanKun mountain where is a place covered with lots of green plant and fresh air.NanKun mountain is kown by the local people ,many vistors are atttracted by its sighting.