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My hometown -Chongqing is a good place to go a sighetseeing,she has an ocean of attractive aspects.At first,people of Chongqing are not only striking and pretty,but also ethusiasitic.Of cource,there exist other fantastic things.Take a example,the famous food hot-pot is the mark of Chongqing.Variteties of hot-pot restruants are around Chongqing,you can chose the one which you are fond on.Jiefangbei is a place you must visit.There are much fabulous things waiting for you. On constructions,there are so many fancy,incrediable and special house or markets.Becaus Chongqing is a mountain city,the natural phere is very different comparing with others.It is so dreamlike.When dawn coming,black has became a geogrous background for Chongqing.When stars twink their eyes in the sky,the different of lights covering the Chongqing.Stand on a higher pots,seeing this is very comfortable.
