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My best friend is Li Hua . Recently , He wants to visit my hometown . I live in Shanghai ,There are many interesting places for his to visit. Such as Center venue ,Bench, and East Nan Jing Road . There are mang shops and supermarkets ,You can buy angthing here . You can enjoy youself at ShangHai's mesume . You can learn the history of China, You will fell China history is amazing . I will take you to Nan Jing road to eat some delicious food ,and you can eat different types of China traditional foods. I hope you can enjoy youself at Shang Hai.
