2014年初中毕业升学考试英语作文集锦132:My Dream Home in the Dream Neighbourhood

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My dream home is in a big neighbourhood.There are many neighbour in the neighbourhood They are friendly to each other.When I have a cold,I will be taken good care of at once.If my things are broken,they will be fixed up.When I be old,some people will look after me.If I have some questions,someone will help me to work them up.There is river around my home,so I can swim in the river in summer.My house is a two-floor building.Besides,there is a big garden outside my house.There are many rooms and a big balcony in my home. This is my dream home.I hope my dream will be come true.