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I have make a friends,she name is Xiaoming,she is pretty.beautiful girl.She love me and that I love you too.She is noble one of the girl,she own intelligent.smart.I am glssed to make with her.I hope that she happy life every day.Beause we are friends.We should love our.When we have prombles or we can refer to the books when we refused.