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建议适当增加些复杂句的使用；作者能词汇表达较准确熟练，但请仔细检查词汇的拼写；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少；可以适当增加副词的使用；请注意分段。
Our Students'Union is plaining to hold an arts festival next semester.For the purpose of holding it more sucessful,inviting the students to give some ideas and suggestion is of great improtance.As far as I concern,the festival should give more opputunitise to students to sing,dance,or draw. Obviously,students couldn't be given more stages to display their talent.To be shy is one of the reason that they are afriad of proforming on the stage. May be this art festival can make them be self-confident to profrom themselves.Futhermore,It will improve their qualirify during their growth.Just as an old saying goes:All work and no play make Jack a dull boy.
