拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;句法知识较好,但需加强句式变化;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
rom: hubin@163.com Date: Dec. 26th, 2008 To: KPOHsales@hobnail,tom Subject: To establish business relationships Dear Sir or Madam, I knew your new product of No. 5670 during the exhibition held in New York on the date of Dec. 15th to 22rid and I was quite interested in it. Please send us a price list and an instruction. Thank you for your attention and we are expecting to establish business relationship with you. We are looking forward to your early reply! Yours sincerely, Hu Bin