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We should do the housework everyday.When I was young,I can help my parents to do some housework.In the morning,I sometimes help my mother to do the breakfast.After I go home from school,I usually clean my room. Before I do my homework, I often do the dishes. Because I usually do the housework,I can realize my parents' hard.I used to be lazy,but now I think I am more industrious then before.Besides,I suppose the teenagers should do more housework. The holiday is coming.I think I need to do more housework,such as wash the clothes,make the bed and so on. Let's do the housework now!
