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Riding a bicycle is preferable to driving a car. Firstly, as we know, riding a bicycle takes more exercise than driving a car. Riding a bicycle can effectively exercise and form a healthy habit. If you substitute riding for driving , it will result in some change that you became lazier and increase weight. Then, riding a bicycle is a clean, nice lifestyle which is healthy and harmony without pollution. Instead, car often release the harmful gases into the air and cause great damage to the environment. Finally, riding a bicycle is a good way to relax and suitable for everyone, because it spends less money that everyone can affort. But driving a car will cost much more money include purchase and maintenance. What a huge expense!
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