2014年6月英语四级作文真题附范文(第2套):A Beautiful City in China

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First,i will take him to The great wall in beijing province,one of the greatest wonders in the world.Having been built from Qin dynasty,it has a long history of thousands years.After being rebuilt by several emperors,it has total 21176 meters long present.Wriggled along the montains,it just looks like a giant dragon.What's more,it is a good place to clime,as the saying goes"One who falis to reach the Great Wall is not a her"Feeling pround of succeeding in climbing the Great Wall,you can as well as enjoy the beautiful scenery.Overlooking form the top of The Great Wall,all the scenary are presented in your eyes.