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Memo To: Mary Chen From: Li Ming Re: New Year’s Party Date: December 23, 2008 It is the time for us to celebrate the new year's Day. we should make a disscussion for the party.as I will be in Beijing for bussiness for a week. it is up to you to decide the time and place of party, please let me know your final decision and what i need do in advance for preparation. Yours, Li Ming