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I have a good friend.His name is Dylan. He is a computer engineer, he is good at computer.When i have a problem with computer, i offen ask for your help. Sometimes,we fishing ,playing basketball,playing computer game.We like to eat chinese food,for example:noodle,rise,fish.by the way,we can play computer games at night.So i was proud of him.