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The impact of the internet on interpersonal communication The computer widely used so that impact interpersonal communication. The internet world is so fanastic. It make us all addicated to it. most of us would choose to play computer rather than stay at home in free time. There is no doubt that internet is disadvatage to interpersonal communication.Firstly,we will become more indifference as we is lack of facing to face communicate.Secondly, it will make our family moe inhumanity as we are lack of talking. Thirdly,there will be so quiet in our class party becasuse we all scan net by telephone. It so terrible! I even can't to wonder that we don't how to talk about when we meet. So, we should to get out of house. Don't alaways paly computer to stay at home. In order to make our family more happy we should talk more with our parent. Our world is so colorful!
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