作者句法知识很棒,适当增加从句的使用,会取得更不错的成绩;作者词汇基础挺好,能灵活使用部分学术词汇,但词汇拼写要再接再厉;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
We all convince that chances abound.What confused people is that how to get full use of them.In fact,a manority of people may put all eggs in one basket,so that they can put all concerntation in one thing which resuilts in they will save more time and energy.Conversely, I maintain that it has a fly in the ointment that everything has a risk which may make you start off with everything and end up with nothing.There are sound proof as follows. Firstly,there are a range of various insurance,such as life insurance,deposit and so on.Some may have high repay,while others are stable and safe.Therefore,invest money and chances in one field is unwise,because you may lose your all property out of your careless.What's more,it can not spread risk.On no account can we neglect the importance ofputting eggs into different baskets