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字数：300 满分：100分
文中学术词汇使用较少，但单词拼写做的很棒；文中应增加从句和复合句的使用；语言不流畅；连词使用偏少。
In the past three years,we have multiplied our possessions and spend too recklessly, but we neglect that our environment becomes worse and more fragile. Maybe my hometown is just the whole of nature in microcosm. Firstly,in the evening,we can catch a clear view upwards of the spotlit temple, while we can not even see a light of shining star and brilliant moon,meantime. However,in childhood,the most romantic thing is to stare up at the starry. What's more, during the daytime,the noisy from the working shovels totally spoils the quietness of the country,which produces musk interfering the flowing of the stream.Besides,rather than clear water and winding lane, it is obvious to see filthy street mingled with exhaust fume and the sewage,which decimates thriving population of fish. There is no more babbling brook, no more fresh air,no tranquility any more.Mixed with my afflicting thought,I wander in hazy sunshine.My hometown, I miss you.
