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2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

发布时间:2013-05-18 11:00浏览次数:17434
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题目:Computer and Man人与电脑

字数:150满分:100分

用户的作文(系统评分69.0分
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作者词汇表达丰富度要继续提升,学术词汇使用过少;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;可以适当增加副词的使用。

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Learn to be Content We live on the earth, and the earth provides many resources for us. We should be grateful to the earth. But looking at the earth, what have we done to our earth? Our earth becomes sick. Do you know the reasons? It is greed that makes the earth sick. As the popular saying goes,"Earth provides enough to satisfy every man's need, but not every one's greed." If we are content, the resources that the earth provides can meet our need and we can have a happy life. But if we are greedy, we will run out of the resources and we will try our best to ge more from the earth to satisfy our need. Then the earth will become sick and we will live a terrible life. For example, people fall trees for meeting the need .But it results to flooding damage and other disasters for the shortage of trees. There are many similar examples, too. We should be aware of it. From this kind of examples, we should know that the earth has provided enough resources to satisfy our need. We should be harmony with the earth and then we will have a happy life.If we become greedy, we will lost all and have a terrible life.

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