文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;建议适当增加些复杂句的使用;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
As reform of China,the english become more popular to learn,at first, it aims to go foreign countries such as The United State for a better life because of high salary.Now it complete dues to college entrance examination for attending to a good college.Since that students rather listening and reading than writing because the exam almost owns much reading and listening opposite writing.As the result of it,there is a little attention on spelling.Then it causes more and more serious in this situation. To turn it to opposite,i advise students should focus on the spelling as well as reading and listening.So how to get that?I have some advise about changing it.You should put that priority in the process of learning english.And you also develop a habit of learning english which make learning english being a part of your life.