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句式变化较为明显，可适当增加从句的使用；可适当增加连接词和衔接词的使用；词汇表达较丰富，学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间，文中有些单词拼错了；连词使用偏少。
Yesterday, in the class meeting, our teacher told us one thing sadly that our classmate Lihua was injured in an accident. We felt pity and the truth that our final exam is around the corner. Our class is a family, and we should help each other and let no one fall behand. The most important things are the study he had fallen behind the cost of the treat. Aim at relieving the stress of the financial problem, students and teachers in our school hold a donation activity to help him. The totally money we have gathered has engouh to pay the next cost and for me, I took part in the help group vorluntarily to help Lihua's study. I felt warm very much in my deeply inner and the feeling of this kind of interpersonal relationship makes me happy and lets me have more energy!
