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I am so glad to hear you are going to my hometown. I decide to show you some places of interest in my hometown,where you shouldn't miss them. first , you should go to ciqikoua for a visit . It is a town ,which has a long history .there are many delicios food ,you will enjoy them very much . in addition,you can have hot pot, which is famous for hot. The people in chongqing are very hospitable. I am looking forward to your coming