可适当增加长句和复杂句的使用;作者能较熟练、灵活地使用词汇,建议要多使用学术词汇;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
“Quitting smoking is the easiest thing in the world,l've done it hundreds of times”.Have you heard of it?It reminds me of nothing successds without a strong will.We need the strong will to do everything. As it is,my parent have also been training me to be a man who has a strong willing when facing difficulties,to be persistent when doing things,and to be full of responsibility. On the one hand,the strong will can improve your confident,you will don't worried about everything.On the other hand,the strong will can help you change bad living habits such as somking and drinking.This is good for health.Take as an example,whenever l'm confronted with obstacles,l understand what is required to up hold and perseverance to succeed. All in all,strong will can equip you for life.We must develops our strong will for childhood.Whatever happens,we should maintain a strong will to facing it.